Title: Delver Magic Book I: Sanctum's Breach
Author: Jeff Inlo
Publisher: Amazon Digital Services
ISBN: N/A ASIN: B0030ZRWW6
Welcome to a world without magic; that is until magic escapes. Ryson Acumen, a freelance scout descended from a race of scouts and living among humans, is sent to investigate an earthquake. Along the way he discovers that myths are real and all of life is about to change. He gathers a group to break into an ancient fortress designed to house the most dangerous magical artifact ever created; their mission: destroy the artifact before it kills everyone.
The story suffers.
First, the main character - and indeed most of them - are romantic in nature. This is something I can tolerate, but really don't want to. The romantic perfection of Ryson - superspeed that prevents anyone from touching him in combat, anyone from escaping him, and the need for time and distance relevance, and an unyielding moral compass - robs the story of so many possible avenues and opportunities that the story becomes predictable.
While the root and basic telling of the story is a compelling read, it suffers repetition. The narrator tells the reader what the characters motivations, thoughts, or actions will be and then has the character actually do or say it. Then the characters are afflicted with the compelling need to preach and then ask "do you understand?" Sadly it seemed more like the writer wanted to convince the reader of an idea rather than lead them there with the story.
It isn't a bad read, but it isn't stellar either. In short it was a four-hundred page (in my epub version) story that could easily have been edited to two-hundred or less.
P.S. - I can't help but wonder if the price (free) and my "auditioning" of new authors (when I've finished the known works of my favorites, I start looking for authors I'm not familiar with and use one of their works as an audition piece) is the only reason I read this. And the next two in the series, too.
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